[NCSG-PC] [Call for volunteers] Public Comment: Pilot Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of Reference

[Tomslin Samme-Nlar]

Hi Kathy, all,

Bolu has updated the draft. Please take a look and provide feedback.

Warmly,
Tomslin

On Tue, 21 Nov 2023, 10:52 Kathy Kleiman, <Kathy at kathykleiman.com> wrote:

> Tx Tomslin, your email certainly woke me up!  I'm glad that you have
> already asked Bolu to make some major changes to the comment.  All good
> :-).
>
> Best, Kathy
> On 11/20/2023 3:58 PM, Tomslin Samme-Nlar wrote:
>
> Hi Kathy,
>
> Thank you. This email was to serve as a wake up request for the PC to
> review the document because there hasn't been any comment from the team
> here regarding the document which I shared on the NCSG list.
>
> I did send Bolu a parallel email to the PC one, asking him to integrate
> the comments that were given during the PC meeting to the document and for
> him to modify the format.
>
> Warmly,
> Tomslin
>
>
>
> On Tue, 21 Nov 2023 at 06:55, Kathy Kleiman <Kathy at kathykleiman.com>
> wrote:
>
>> << Hi team, is this okay to submit?
>>
>> Warmly, Tomslin>>
>>
>> Tomslin,
>>
>> I'm afraid I do not understand our draft NCSG comment.  Bolu seems to be
>> responding to the four questions that commenters raised in the first round
>> of comments.  Now, in this second round of comments, ICANN asks us to
>> respond to a
>> *different set of questions.  (Pasted below) *
>>
>> If I read it correctly, Bolu is repeating what ICANN Staff has told us in
>> this Terms of Reference Draft, but not commenting on whether we (NCSG)
>> agree, support, express concerns, etc.  It's not enough to summarize what
>> Staff has presented.
>>
>> *Could we ask someone to work with him, e.g. Pedro?  Could someone else
>> from NCSG PC take a close look? *
>>
>> Best, Kathy
>>
>> ==> [Kathy cutting and pasting from current ICANN comment notice]
>>
>> "The primary focus of the Pilot Holistic Review Draft Terms of Reference
>> (ToR) is to address the four primary issues raised during the first Public
>> Comment proceeding:
>>
>>    - The scope of Holistic Review is unclear
>>    - There is a lack of independent examination in the Holistic Review
>>    - There is a lack of identified dependencies
>>    - The community might not have the ability to support the Pilot
>>    Holistic Review work
>>
>> The ToR Development Team also shortened and revised the ToR document to
>> include more direct language and clearer deliverables.
>>
>> Considering the potential implications on the ICANN structures and work,
>> the Board is seeking input on whether the revised Draft ToR seems fit for
>> purpose, and whether it sufficiently addresses the issues identified in the
>> first Public Comment proceeding.
>>
>> The following questions are designed to aid responders in formulating
>> their views:
>>
>>    1. Do you support the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of
>>    Reference as drafted?
>>    2. Does the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>>    sufficiently address the four primary issues identified in the first Public
>>    Comment proceeding?
>>    3. Does the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>>    sufficiently clarify the deliverables for the Pilot Holistic Review?
>>    4. Do you support the next steps for the Pilot Holistic Review (as
>>    noted below)?"
>>
>> On Tue, 14 Nov 2023 at 06:40, Tomslin Samme-Nlar <mesumbeslin at gmail.com>
>> wrote:
>>
>>> Hi all,
>>>
>>> As promised on the call earlier, here is the link to the NCSG draft
>>> comment that Bolu is leading
>>> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hxiw_roMyfKOKd200KiUfQSR8ODgLIuNujsmeT_yDqc/edit?usp=sharing
>>>
>>> Warmly,
>>> Tomslin
>>>
>>
>> On Thu, 5 Oct 2023 at 21:28, Tomslin Samme-Nlar <mesumbeslin at gmail.com>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Dear all,
>>>>
>>>> The ICANN Board is seeking the community input on the proposed Pilot
>>>> Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of Reference. This is a review of
>>>> interest to NCSG, so it would be great to have members volunteer to draft a
>>>> comment for our SG.
>>>>
>>>> The public comment is due on 27 November 2023, so if you'd like to
>>>> volunteer,  please reach out.
>>>>
>>>> More information on the comment can be found from the below link:
>>>>
>>>> https://www.icann.org/en/public-comment/proceeding/pilot-holistic-review-revised-terms-of-reference-tor-28-09-2023
>>>>
>>>> Warmly,
>>>> Tomslin
>>>>
>>>
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