[NCSG-PC] [Call for volunteers] Public Comment: Pilot Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of Reference

[Kathy Kleiman]

Tx Tomslin, your email certainly woke me up!  I'm glad that you have 
already asked Bolu to make some major changes to the comment.  All good 
:-).

Best, Kathy

On 11/20/2023 3:58 PM, Tomslin Samme-Nlar wrote:
> Hi Kathy,
>
> Thank you. This email was to serve as a wake up request for the PC to 
> review the document because there hasn't been any comment from the 
> team here regarding the document which I shared on the NCSG list.
>
> I did send Bolu a parallel email to the PC one, asking him to 
> integrate the comments that were given during the PC meeting to the 
> document and for him to modify the format.
>
> Warmly,
> Tomslin
>
>
>
> On Tue, 21 Nov 2023 at 06:55, Kathy Kleiman <Kathy at kathykleiman.com> 
> wrote:
>
>     << Hi team, is this okay to submit?
>
>     Warmly, Tomslin>>
>
>     Tomslin,
>
>     I'm afraid I do not understand our draft NCSG comment. Bolu seems
>     to be responding to the four questions that commenters raised in
>     the first round of comments.  Now, in this second round of
>     comments, ICANN asks us to respond to a /different set of
>     questions.  (Pasted below)
>     /
>
>     If I read it correctly, Bolu is repeating what ICANN Staff has
>     told us in this Terms of Reference Draft, but not commenting on
>     whether we (NCSG) agree, support, express concerns, etc.  It's not
>     enough to summarize what Staff has presented.
>
>     */Could we ask someone to work with him, e.g. Pedro? Could someone
>     else from NCSG PC take a close look? /*
>
>     Best, Kathy
>
>
>     ==> [Kathy cutting and pasting from current ICANN comment notice]
>
>     "The primary focus of the Pilot Holistic Review Draft Terms of
>     Reference (ToR) is to address the four primary issues raised
>     during the first Public Comment proceeding:
>
>       * The scope of Holistic Review is unclear
>       * There is a lack of independent examination in the Holistic Review
>       * There is a lack of identified dependencies
>       * The community might not have the ability to support the Pilot
>         Holistic Review work
>
>     The ToR Development Team also shortened and revised the ToR
>     document to include more direct language and clearer deliverables.
>
>     Considering the potential implications on the ICANN structures and
>     work, the Board is seeking input on whether the revised Draft ToR
>     seems fit for purpose, and whether it sufficiently addresses the
>     issues identified in the first Public Comment proceeding.
>
>     The following questions are designed to aid responders in
>     formulating their views:
>
>      1. Do you support the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of
>         Reference as drafted?
>      2. Does the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>         sufficiently address the four primary issues identified in the
>         first Public Comment proceeding?
>      3. Does the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>         sufficiently clarify the deliverables for the Pilot Holistic
>         Review?
>      4. Do you support the next steps for the Pilot Holistic Review
>         (as noted below)?"
>
>     On Tue, 14 Nov 2023 at 06:40, Tomslin Samme-Nlar
>     <mesumbeslin at gmail.com> wrote:
>
>         Hi all,
>
>         As promised on the call earlier, here is the link to the NCSG
>         draft comment that Bolu is leading
>         https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hxiw_roMyfKOKd200KiUfQSR8ODgLIuNujsmeT_yDqc/edit?usp=sharing
>
>
>         Warmly,
>         Tomslin
>
>
>>         On Thu, 5 Oct 2023 at 21:28, Tomslin Samme-Nlar
>>         <mesumbeslin at gmail.com> wrote:
>>
>>             Dear all,
>>
>>             The ICANN Board is seeking the community input on the
>>             proposed Pilot Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of
>>             Reference. This is a review of interest to NCSG, so it
>>             would be great to have members volunteer to draft a
>>             comment for our SG.
>>
>>             The public comment is due on 27 November 2023, so if
>>             you'd like to volunteer, please reach out.
>>
>>             More information on the comment can be found from the
>>             below link:
>>             https://www.icann.org/en/public-comment/proceeding/pilot-holistic-review-revised-terms-of-reference-tor-28-09-2023
>>
>>             Warmly,
>>             Tomslin
>>
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