[NCSG-PC] [Call for volunteers] Public Comment: Pilot Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of Reference

[Tomslin Samme-Nlar]

Hi Kathy,

Thank you. This email was to serve as a wake up request for the PC to
review the document because there hasn't been any comment from the team
here regarding the document which I shared on the NCSG list.

I did send Bolu a parallel email to the PC one, asking him to integrate the
comments that were given during the PC meeting to the document and for him
to modify the format.

Warmly,
Tomslin



On Tue, 21 Nov 2023 at 06:55, Kathy Kleiman <Kathy at kathykleiman.com> wrote:

> << Hi team, is this okay to submit?
>
> Warmly, Tomslin>>
>
> Tomslin,
>
> I'm afraid I do not understand our draft NCSG comment.  Bolu seems to be
> responding to the four questions that commenters raised in the first round
> of comments.  Now, in this second round of comments, ICANN asks us to
> respond to a
> *different set of questions.  (Pasted below) *
>
> If I read it correctly, Bolu is repeating what ICANN Staff has told us in
> this Terms of Reference Draft, but not commenting on whether we (NCSG)
> agree, support, express concerns, etc.  It's not enough to summarize what
> Staff has presented.
>
> *Could we ask someone to work with him, e.g. Pedro?  Could someone else
> from NCSG PC take a close look? *
>
> Best, Kathy
>
> ==> [Kathy cutting and pasting from current ICANN comment notice]
>
> "The primary focus of the Pilot Holistic Review Draft Terms of Reference
> (ToR) is to address the four primary issues raised during the first Public
> Comment proceeding:
>
>    - The scope of Holistic Review is unclear
>    - There is a lack of independent examination in the Holistic Review
>    - There is a lack of identified dependencies
>    - The community might not have the ability to support the Pilot
>    Holistic Review work
>
> The ToR Development Team also shortened and revised the ToR document to
> include more direct language and clearer deliverables.
>
> Considering the potential implications on the ICANN structures and work,
> the Board is seeking input on whether the revised Draft ToR seems fit for
> purpose, and whether it sufficiently addresses the issues identified in the
> first Public Comment proceeding.
>
> The following questions are designed to aid responders in formulating
> their views:
>
>    1. Do you support the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>    as drafted?
>    2. Does the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>    sufficiently address the four primary issues identified in the first Public
>    Comment proceeding?
>    3. Does the Pilot Holistic Review Revised Terms of Reference
>    sufficiently clarify the deliverables for the Pilot Holistic Review?
>    4. Do you support the next steps for the Pilot Holistic Review (as
>    noted below)?"
>
> On Tue, 14 Nov 2023 at 06:40, Tomslin Samme-Nlar <mesumbeslin at gmail.com>
> wrote:
>
>> Hi all,
>>
>> As promised on the call earlier, here is the link to the NCSG draft
>> comment that Bolu is leading
>> https://docs.google.com/document/d/1hxiw_roMyfKOKd200KiUfQSR8ODgLIuNujsmeT_yDqc/edit?usp=sharing
>>
>> Warmly,
>> Tomslin
>>
>
> On Thu, 5 Oct 2023 at 21:28, Tomslin Samme-Nlar <mesumbeslin at gmail.com>
>> wrote:
>>
>>> Dear all,
>>>
>>> The ICANN Board is seeking the community input on the proposed Pilot
>>> Holistic Review Revised Draft Terms of Reference. This is a review of
>>> interest to NCSG, so it would be great to have members volunteer to draft a
>>> comment for our SG.
>>>
>>> The public comment is due on 27 November 2023, so if you'd like to
>>> volunteer,  please reach out.
>>>
>>> More information on the comment can be found from the below link:
>>>
>>> https://www.icann.org/en/public-comment/proceeding/pilot-holistic-review-revised-terms-of-reference-tor-28-09-2023
>>>
>>> Warmly,
>>> Tomslin
>>>
>>
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