[NCSG-PC] Fwd: Re: [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

[Stephanie Perrin]

Forwarding Pam's comments, they are helpful.

SP



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Subject: 	Re: [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope
Date: 	Mon, 16 Jul 2018 14:49:57 +0800
From: 	Pam Little <pam.little at alibaba-inc.com>
Reply-To: 	Pam Little <pam.little at alibaba-inc.com>
To: 	Epdp-dt at icann.org <Epdp-dt at icann.org>, marika.konings at icann.org 
<marika.konings at icann.org>, Drazek, Keith <kdrazek at verisign.com>



Hi Keith

Many thanks to you and the small drafting team for the "final" draft.

Because of time zone differences, I have not had an opportunity to 
discuss this with my RrSG councillors or RrSG members but, in the 
interest fo time, I have made some suggested edits and queries to the 
final draft. Most of them are intended to correct minor errors or add 
more clarity and consistency so I hope they are not controversial, 
except perhaps my proposed change to J2 below:

"J2) Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be clarified or 
defined reconciled with the objective of avoiding, to the extent 
possible, an unharmonized approach to third-party access to registration 
data, ,without the implementation of a community-wide model for access 
or similar framework which takes into account at least the following 
elements:"


It seems to me neither the langauge in the previous draft (re 
fragmentation of WHOIS) nor the final draft was helpful hence my 
proposed change to try to make it more neutral.

I also have a question regarding the last paragraph in the final draft:

/"The EPDP Team shall respect the timelines and deliverables as outlined 
in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN Bylaws and the EPDP Manual. As per the 
GNSO EPDP Working Group Guidelines, the EPDP Team shall develop a work 
plan that outlines the necessary steps and expected timing in order to 
achieve the milestones of the EPDP as set out in Annex A and A-1 of the 
ICANN Bylaws and the EPDP Manual and submit this to the GNSO Council. 
Any significant updates to the work plan are expected to be communicated 
in a timely manner to the GNSO Council with an explanation as to why the 
work plan needed adjustment." /


The final draft Charter has set timelines for Deliverable 2. Is the EPDP 
Team expected to develop a work plan for all three deliverables?

Kind regards,

Pam

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    Sender:Drazek, Keith via Epdp-dt <epdp-dt at icann.org>
    Sent at:2018 Jul 16 (Mon) 13:08
    To:Epdp-dt at icann.org <Epdp-dt at icann.org>; marika.konings at icann.org
    <marika.konings at icann.org>
    Subject:[Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

    Hello again everyone….

    Now attached is the final draft of the EPDP WG Charter scope section
    for your review and our vote on the 19^th .

    I have attached the redline version (against the version circulate
    to the DT last Wednesday) and the clean version.

    Thanks for your patience and for the constructive input of all parties.

    Regards,

    Keith

    *From:* Drazek, Keith
    *Sent:* Sunday, July 15, 2018 10:28 AM
    *To:* Drazek, Keith <kdrazek at verisign.com>
    *Cc:* Epdp-dt at icann.org; marika.konings at icann.org
    *Subject:* Re: [EXTERNAL] [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope

    Hi all. Please wait before reviewing. I may have jumped the gun and
    we may have more suggested edits incoming from NCSG.

    Thanks,

    Keith


    On Jul 15, 2018, at 8:44 AM, Drazek, Keith via Epdp-dt
    <epdp-dt at icann.org <mailto:epdp-dt at icann.org>> wrote:

    Hi all,

    As discussed on Wednesday’s EPDP Drafting Team call, attached is the
    final draft of the EPDP charter scope section.

    I received a few suggested edits from Stephanie and Darcy and did my
    best to incorporate/address them. The small group has reviewed and
    agreed this is ready for approval at the 19 July Council meeting.

    Thanks to everyone for your contributions to this effort.

    Regards,

    Keith

    <Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits.docx>

    <Updated Scope Section 15 July 2018 -- Consolidated Edits CLEAN.docx>

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