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    <p><font size="+1"><font face="Lucida Grande">SP</font></font><br>
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            <td>Re: [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope</td>
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            <td>Mon, 16 Jul 2018 14:49:57 +0800</td>
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            <th valign="BASELINE" nowrap="nowrap" align="RIGHT">From: </th>
            <td>Pam Little <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:pam.little@alibaba-inc.com"><pam.little@alibaba-inc.com></a></td>
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            <td>Pam Little <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:pam.little@alibaba-inc.com"><pam.little@alibaba-inc.com></a></td>
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            <td><a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:Epdp-dt@icann.org">Epdp-dt@icann.org</a> <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:Epdp-dt@icann.org"><Epdp-dt@icann.org></a>,
              <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:marika.konings@icann.org">marika.konings@icann.org</a> <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:marika.konings@icann.org"><marika.konings@icann.org></a>,
              Drazek, Keith <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:kdrazek@verisign.com"><kdrazek@verisign.com></a></td>
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        <div style="clear:both;"><span
style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;">Hi
            Keith</span></div>
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style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;"><br>
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        <div style="clear:both;"><span
style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;">Many
            thanks to you and the small drafting team for the "final"
            draft. </span></div>
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style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;"><br>
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        <div style="clear:both;"><span
style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;">Because
            of time zone differences, I have not had an opportunity to
            discuss this with my RrSG councillors or RrSG members but,
            in the interest fo time, I have made some suggested edits
            and queries to the final draft. Most of them are intended to
            correct minor errors or add more clarity and consistency so
            I hope they are not controversial, except perhaps </span>my
          proposed change to J2 below:</div>
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style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;"><br>
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.0pt;line-height:16.9px;caret-color:#000000;font-variant-caps:normal;text-align:start;text-indent:.0px;"><span
style="font-size:15.0px;font-family:Calibri;color:#000000;font-style:normal;font-weight:normal;text-transform:none;text-decoration:none;">"J2)
              Can the obligation to provide “reasonable access” be <span
style="font-size:15.0px;font-family:Calibri;font-style:normal;font-weight:normal;text-transform:none;text-decoration:none;color:#ff0000;">clarified
                or defined</span> </span><span
style="font-size:15.0px;font-family:Calibri;color:#000000;font-style:normal;font-weight:normal;text-transform:none;text-decoration:line-through;">reconciled
              with the objective of avoiding, to the extent possible, an
              unharmonized approach to third-party access to
              registration data, ,</span><span
style="font-size:15.0px;font-family:Calibri;color:#000000;font-style:normal;font-weight:normal;text-transform:none;text-decoration:none;">
              without the implementation of a community-wide model for
              access or similar framework which takes into account at
              least the following elements:"</span></p>
          <span
style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;"></span></div>
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          <div
style="margin:.0px;padding:.0px;border:.0px;outline:.0px;caret-color:#000000;color:#000000;font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;font-style:normal;font-variant-caps:normal;font-weight:normal;text-align:start;text-indent:.0px;text-transform:none;background-color:#ffffff;text-decoration:none;clear:both;">It
            seems to me neither the langauge in the previous draft (re <span
style="margin:.0px;padding:.0px;border:.0px;outline:.0px;font-family:tahoma;"><span
style="margin:.0px;padding:.0px;border:.0px;outline:.0px;line-height:16.9px;">fragmentation</span> </span>of
            WHOIS) nor the final draft was helpful hence my proposed
            change to try to make it more neutral. <br>
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        <div style="clear:both;"><span
style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;">I
            also have a question regarding the last paragraph in the
            final draft:</span></div>
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            .0cm .0pt;line-height:normal;"><em><span
style="color:#000000;font-weight:normal;text-transform:none;text-decoration:none;font-size:15.0px;font-family:Calibri;">"The
                EPDP Team shall respect the <span
                  class="spellcheck_typo">timelines</span> and
                deliverables as outlined in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN
                Bylaws and the EPDP Manual. As per the GNSO EPDP Working
                Group Guidelines, the EPDP Team shall develop a work
                plan that outlines the necessary steps and expected
                timing in order to achieve the milestones of the EPDP as
                set out in Annex A and A-1 of the ICANN Bylaws and the
                EPDP Manual and submit this to the GNSO Council. Any
                significant updates to the work plan are expected to be
                communicated in a timely manner to the GNSO Council with
                an explanation as to why the work plan needed
                adjustment." </span></em></p>
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          The final draft Charter has set <span class="spellcheck_typo">timelines</span>
          for <span
style="caret-color:#000000;color:#000000;font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;font-style:normal;font-variant-caps:normal;font-weight:normal;text-align:start;text-indent:.0px;text-transform:none;background-color:#ffffff;text-decoration:none;float:none;display:inline;">Deliverable
            2. <span
style="caret-color:#000000;color:#000000;font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;font-style:normal;font-variant-caps:normal;font-weight:normal;text-align:start;text-indent:.0px;text-transform:none;background-color:#ffffff;text-decoration:none;float:none;display:inline;">Is
              the </span><span
style="caret-color:#000000;color:#000000;font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;font-style:normal;font-variant-caps:normal;font-weight:normal;text-align:start;text-indent:.0px;text-transform:none;background-color:#ffffff;text-decoration:none;float:none;display:inline;">EPDP
              Team expected to develop a work plan for all three
              deliverables? </span></span></div>
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        <div style="clear:both;">Kind regards,</div>
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        <div style="clear:both;">Pam</div>
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style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;">Sender:Drazek,
              Keith via Epdp-dt <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:epdp-dt@icann.org"><epdp-dt@icann.org></a></span></div>
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              at:2018 Jul 16 (Mon) 13:08</span></div>
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              <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:Epdp-dt@icann.org"><Epdp-dt@icann.org></a>; <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:marika.konings@icann.org">marika.konings@icann.org</a>
              <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:marika.konings@icann.org"><marika.konings@icann.org></a></span></div>
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style="font-family:Tahoma,Arial,STHeiti,SimSun;font-size:14.0px;color:#000000;">Subject:[Epdp-dt]
              EPDP Scope</span></div>
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            <p class="MsoNormal">Hello again everyone….</p>
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            <p class="MsoNormal">Now attached is the final draft of the
              EPDP WG Charter scope section for your review and our vote
              on the 19<sup>th</sup>.</p>
            <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
            <p class="MsoNormal">I have attached the redline version
              (against the version circulate to the DT last Wednesday)
              and the clean version.</p>
            <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
            <p class="MsoNormal">Thanks for your patience and for the
              constructive input of all parties.</p>
            <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
            <p class="MsoNormal">Regards,</p>
            <p class="MsoNormal">Keith</p>
            <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
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                <p class="MsoNormal"><b>From:</b> Drazek, Keith <br>
                  <b>Sent:</b> Sunday, July 15, 2018 10:28 AM<br>
                  <b>To:</b> Drazek, Keith <a class="moz-txt-link-rfc2396E" href="mailto:kdrazek@verisign.com"><kdrazek@verisign.com></a><br>
                  <b>Cc:</b> <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:Epdp-dt@icann.org">Epdp-dt@icann.org</a>; <a class="moz-txt-link-abbreviated" href="mailto:marika.konings@icann.org">marika.konings@icann.org</a><br>
                  <b>Subject:</b> Re: [EXTERNAL] [Epdp-dt] EPDP Scope</p>
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              <p class="MsoNormal">Hi all. Please wait before reviewing.
                I may have jumped the gun and we may have more suggested
                edits incoming from NCSG.</p>
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              <p class="MsoNormal">Thanks,</p>
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              <p class="MsoNormal">Keith</p>
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                On Jul 15, 2018, at 8:44 AM, Drazek, Keith via Epdp-dt
                <<a href="mailto:epdp-dt@icann.org" target="_blank"
                  moz-do-not-send="true">epdp-dt@icann.org</a>>
                wrote:</p>
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              <p class="MsoNormal">Hi all,</p>
              <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
              <p class="MsoNormal">As discussed on <span
                  class="spellcheck_typo">Wednesday’s</span> EPDP
                Drafting Team call, attached is the final draft of the
                EPDP charter scope section.
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              <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
              <p class="MsoNormal">I received a few suggested edits from
                Stephanie and <span class="spellcheck_typo">Darcy</span>
                and did my best to incorporate/address them. The small
                group has reviewed and agreed this is ready for approval
                at the 19 July Council meeting.</p>
              <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
              <p class="MsoNormal">Thanks to everyone for your
                contributions to this effort.</p>
              <p class="MsoNormal"> </p>
              <p class="MsoNormal">Regards,</p>
              <p class="MsoNormal">Keith</p>
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              <p class="MsoNormal"><Updated Scope Section 15 July
                2018 -- Consolidated Edits.<span class="spellcheck_typo">docx</span>></p>
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              <p class="MsoNormal"><Updated Scope Section 15 July
                2018 -- Consolidated Edits CLEAN.<span
                  class="spellcheck_typo">docx</span>></p>
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