[NCSG-PC] Fwd: Updated Scope for Review

[Stephanie Perrin]

I am forwarding this new version received from Keith yesterday. Please 
do not edit the documents he sent.  I also attach my edits on his 
document...hard to keep track of this document, I found a bunch of new 
things to object to, and cannot tell anymore whether I already commented 
and was ignored, or what. It is called July 15 version, v2spedits.  
Please get back to me asap with further comments, Keith is working on it 
today....


Cheers Steph



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Subject: 	Updated Scope for Review
Date: 	Sat, 14 Jul 2018 15:34:26 +0000
From: 	Drazek, Keith <kdrazek at verisign.com>
To: 	PMcGrady at winston.com <PMcGrady at winston.com>, 
stephanie.perrin at mail.utoronto.ca <stephanie.perrin at mail.utoronto.ca>, 
susankpolicy at gmail.com <susankpolicy at gmail.com>
CC: 	Donna.Austin at team.neustar <Donna.Austin at team.neustar>, 
marika.konings at icann.org <marika.konings at icann.org>, 
caitlin.tubergen at icann.org <caitlin.tubergen at icann.org>, 
haforrestesq at gmail.com <haforrestesq at gmail.com>, rafik.dammak at gmail.com 
<rafik.dammak at gmail.com>



Hi Paul, Stephanie and Susan,

Attached is the updated scope document for your review. I have attached 
a redline version, a clean version, and the two sets of comments 
received from Stephanie and Darcy, both of which I’ve attempted to 
incorporate.


The one comment from Darcy that I did not incorporate was a request to 
be more explicit about the timing of initiating discussions on an Access 
Model – to be at the time of publication of the Initial Report, rather 
than a less explicit trigger of answering the gating questions. You can 
see her comments in the attached.

Otherwise, I think the edits are good and do not substantially or 
materially impact the previous draft. Please note any concerns, issues 
or suggested edits ASAP so we can send the final stable draft to the DT 
by Sunday night.

I’m hoping this is our last pass at this!

Thanks in advance,

Keith

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