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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">Rafik<o:p></o:p></span></p>
<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">These are great comments, but since DIDP is Workstream 2 I don’t think it should be included in this round.
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">This is the final or next-to-final CCWG WS 1 proposal we are commenting on, and we are trying to emphasize some critical aspects of WS1 Proposal that need to
be changed. I think it detracts from that a bit to raise DIDP unless there is some decision that will be taken regarding DIDP in this round.<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">--MM<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal"><b><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif">From:</span></b><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif"> Rafik Dammak [mailto:rafik.dammak@gmail.com]
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<b>Sent:</b> Wednesday, September 9, 2015 10:13 PM<br>
<b>To:</b> Mueller, Milton L<br>
<b>Cc:</b> NCSG-DISCUSS@listserv.syr.edu; Michael Karanicolas<br>
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [NCSG-Discuss] Last CCWG comments last call<o:p></o:p></span></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Hi Milton,<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">thanks for solving the HR language .<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">On other hand, there is a proposal about DIDP from Michael Karanicolas ,to be added to our comment, since we would like to work on that in workstream2 and we are having an ad-hoc group of NCSG members interested in this topic.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">the proposal is attached. comments and edits are welcome.<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Best,<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">Rafik<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal">2015-09-08 11:28 GMT+09:00 Mueller, Milton L <<a href="mailto:milton.mueller@pubpolicy.gatech.edu" target="_blank">milton.mueller@pubpolicy.gatech.edu</a>>:<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">OK, I have made some minor modifications based on these discussions, the only significant one related
to human rights. The new language reads: </span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black">The CCWG solicits comments on two different ways of formulating ICANN’s commitment to human rights. Option
one expressed ICANN’s commitment “to respect the fundamental human rights of the exercise of free expression and the free flow of information.” Option 2 expressed ICANN’s commitment more broadly, “Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed
to respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights.”</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black">With one member organization exception, NCSG tends toward support for the second, more general formulation.
The first formulation is too limited because other human rights, such as privacy, are relevant to ICANN policies. We do, however, recognize that a generic reference to human rights might not work as effectively as more specific requirements, and that freedom
of expression and privacy are two human rights most directly relevant to ICANN’s policy activity. Our preference, therefore, would be to formulate the commitment this way:
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<span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Arial",sans-serif;color:black">“Within its mission and in its operations, ICANN will be committed to respect internationally recognized fundamental human rights, in particular freedom of expression and privacy.”</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif;color:#1F497D">I hope the policy committee can approve the whole document and get it submitted to the CCWG public
comment period tomorrow. </span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><b><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif">From:</span></b><span style="font-size:11.0pt;font-family:"Calibri",sans-serif"> NCSG-Discuss [mailto:<a href="mailto:NCSG-DISCUSS@LISTSERV.SYR.EDU" target="_blank">NCSG-DISCUSS@LISTSERV.SYR.EDU</a>]
<b>On Behalf Of </b>William Drake<br>
<b>Sent:</b> Monday, September 7, 2015 7:35 AM<br>
<b>To:</b> <a href="mailto:NCSG-DISCUSS@LISTSERV.SYR.EDU" target="_blank">NCSG-DISCUSS@LISTSERV.SYR.EDU</a><br>
<b>Subject:</b> Re: [NCSG-Discuss] CCWG comments last call</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto">On Sep 7, 2015, at 11:22 AM, Tapani Tarvainen <<a href="mailto:ncuc@TAPANI.TARVAINEN.INFO" target="_blank">ncuc@TAPANI.TARVAINEN.INFO</a>> wrote:<o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="font-size:13.5pt;font-family:"Verdana",sans-serif">compromise phrasing like "... human rights, in particular<br>
freedom of expression and privacy" might work.</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="color:black">Works for me, per the F2F discussions with other stakeholders since summer 2014.</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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<p class="MsoNormal" style="mso-margin-top-alt:auto;mso-margin-bottom-alt:auto"><span style="color:black">Bill</span><o:p></o:p></p>
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